Poem Help! ! !

[LecentiousBastard]

Riddler that is GoOd, also Skweeky i don't hink it is childish, i think it is harder to make a poem that rhymes rather than one that doesn't. That is my opinion though. Thanks Ridler good work =P

[ne1GotZardoz]

Originally posted by Skweeky+19 April 2003 - 08:51--></span><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Skweeky @ 19 April 2003 - 08:51)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin--LecentiousBastard@19 April 2003 - 14:33
That isn&#39;t bad but fi it rhymed it would be better

yeah...but I don&#39;t like poems that rhyme....they look, I don&#39;t know, childish in a way...

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Childish?

Poetry was first, song.

The bard would strum his mandolin and sing of love and war and noble deeds.

The only reason there are poems that don&#39;t rhyme or at least have a decent rhythm, is that back a few decades ago, a few stupid people missunderstood the lack of rhyme or rhythm in &#39;translated&#39; poetry, to mean that a poem did not need rhyme or rhythm.

&#39;What fools these mortals be&#39;.

Any idiot can write a poem when you remove those limitations.

A true poet writes from the soul/heart/what-have-you. As a poem it has a natural flow...A form that can usually be immediately distinguished from...Oh...Say...A story.

Might I suggest you read translated poetry in its original form.

That said...Here is my attempt:

Cultivator

Cold is my heart without you,
Unknowing of love&#39;s gentle heat.
Lost in the darkness, longing.
Till again, you and I shall meet.

I am a fool for your sweet kiss.
Vanity that I should even try.
All that I am, I give you.
Take me now, or I shall die.
Or live in misery for what I missed.
Remembering, till in my grave I lie.

[Skweeky]

jee, it&#39;s just my opinion you know.....anyway, poetry sounds different in every language, and I assure you, that Dutch isn&#39;t exactly the best language to write rhyming poems in...

[Spindulik]

Originally posted by Z@19 April 2003 - 06:37
seriously, dont use that word. its not really what youre looking for. it has more to do with gardening, farming, cultivating, and the such. not so much helper, if thats what you thought. but anyways...

Come on girl, my love for you&#39;s true

Unbelievable that you love me too

Love is what makes this relationship last

Till no health, no weath, or u hear me pass gas
(sorry for that, couldnt help it )

Till forever, until an eternity&#39;s passed

I will always cherish you

Vvvvv....cant think of anything&#33;

Admiration i have for you

Tonight we will make love so true

Oh no i smell something really strong

Ripped a big one through your thong&#33;

sorry man i just couldnt resist&#33;

LOL
Very good. I see that you drew a blank midway too.

[KinkoStinky]

Come over here my true,
Underneath it all makes me blue.
Listening to your tight little thong,
To tight makes me think of a song.
In time ill dump you and make you pass,
Ven ill kill you with my gas.
Although your prety now,
To later you&#39;ll get ugly wow&#33;
On top of you is that whore,
Right away, I like you more&#33;

Come for I have something to say,
Ultill the time comes,
Licking shall pay.
Till the time when you just gas,
I just roll over and the
Vapors will pass.
Allthough my love is just so true,
Till of corse before I turn blue,
O I will get pay back before I sing the song, I just
Ripped another in your thong&#33;

I know I know, my songs suck...

[Spindulik]

I feel like I am to blame for starting all of this poetic gas here.

[Riddler]

KingYoshi&#39;s sounds like some of &#39;Slipknot&#39;s&#39; early work. It may become a collector&#39;s item. Do you have an agent? B)

Riddle me this; What crime is punishable if attempted....but not if commited ? ( this is too easy I know, but they&#39;ll get tougher if you want to play )

[Z]

Originally posted by Spindulik@19 April 2003 - 21:41
I feel like I am to blame for starting all of this poetic gas here.

yeah nice job.

[ne1GotZardoz]

Originally posted by Riddler@19 April 2003 - 22:33
Riddle me this; What crime is punishable if attempted....but not if commited ? ( this is too easy I know, but they&#39;ll get tougher if you want to play )

Holy suicide Batman...Its the Riddler&#33;

[Riddler]

B) Correctamundo Richie&#33; That poem of yours, by the way, earns an A also ---step to the head of the class and grab a handful of apples&#33;
Riddle #2; From the beginning of eternity....to the end of time
To the beginning of every end....and the end of every place

What am I ?

( besides seriously in need of another hobby. )