"Your Mother and I" by The Vergent Tallion

**mr.mystery** · 10-16-2007, 11:52 PM

umm, ok thanks for the compliment, you just told me ive achieved what i told you before i set out to do.

your a complete retard, serious

**Cheese** · 10-16-2007, 11:58 PM

Originally Posted by mr.mystery

umm, ok thanks for the compliment, you just told me ive achieved what i told you before i set out to do.

your a complete retard, serious

Well done on achieving what you set out to do. You're obviously the kind of girl who likes to aim low so as to avoid disappointment.

I mean, it would be probably be too much to ask that you set out to write something that was weird, different and half-decent to read. ~~Maybe~~ Obviously, writing isn't your thing.

Don't give up the day-job (if you have one), I don't think you'll be making poet laureate just yet.

**mr.mystery** · 10-17-2007, 12:00 AM

^no, your still a retard

**Cheese** · 10-17-2007, 12:06 AM

Originally Posted by mr.mystery

^no, your still a retard

You really do have a gift for words don't you.

**brotherdoobie** · 10-17-2007, 12:21 AM

I believe it's someone pretending to be JPaul. I don't even know where to begin, as far as critiquing of the story is concerned.

Cheese's summary was dead on. It's pointless drivel and I would rather read and discuss someones genuine attempt at art - pretentious or not. It's obvious that the writer thinks he's being clever, by feigning a weak writers posture.

I believe that in reality you have nothing compelling to offer, at all (at all).

If it was a genuine attempt...I'm sorry. (empathy) Have you thought about starting a blog?

-bd