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Riddler
11-06-2003, 02:48 PM
In the spirit of the other poetic threads, I give you the Bizarre Haiku Challenge. :D
SensualGardening, if he accepts this mission, and yours truly will grade your submissions on a 1 to 3 scale.
1= rather strange
2= freaky
3= truly bizarre
For those who are unfamiliar with Haiku structure, here is a brief guideline to the traditional form;
Usually it has 3 lines and 17 syllabes distributed in 5, 7 and 5. It must register or indicate a moment, sensation, impression or drama of a specific fact of nature. It's almost like a photo of some specific moment of nature.
But for our purposes, it doesn't have to be about nature. The subject can be anything that enters your head. And the best part is........it's not supposed to rhyme !
So, I'll start us off with a simple one I managed to put together based on reading various topics in the Lounge today. Btw, I would rate this a 1. ;)
Forum soon will pass
Why, oh why ? I am saddened.
Please buy my mangoes
Happy Haikuing ! :D
shinzuiski
11-06-2003, 02:50 PM
My name is bob
i live in a blob
why are toilets white?
--
it makes just as much sence as
Forum soon will pass
Why, oh why ? I am saddened.
Please buy my mangoes so dont tell me its not a haiku thingy :ph34r:
Riddler
11-06-2003, 02:52 PM
You've got the hang of it ! The weirder the better ! That one's a 1. :)
Originally posted by Riddler@6 November 2003 - 16:48
In the spirit of the other poetic threads, I give you the Bizarre Haiku Challenge. :D
SensualGardening, if he accepts this mission, and yours truly will grade your submissions on a 1 to 3 scale.
1= rather strange
2= freaky
3= truly bizarre
For those who are unfamiliar with Haiku structure, here is a brief guideline to the traditional form;
Usually it has 3 lines and 17 syllabes distributed in 5, 7 and 5. It must register or indicate a moment, sensation, impression or drama of a specific fact of nature. It's almost like a photo of some specific moment of nature.
But for our purposes, it doesn't have to be about nature. The subject can be anything that enters your head. And the best part is........it's not supposed to rhyme !
So, I'll start us off with a simple one I managed to put together based on reading various topics in the Lounge today. Btw, I would rate this a 1. ;)
Forum soon will pass
Why, oh why ? I am saddened.
Please buy my mangoes
Happy Haikuing ! :D
Oh, Yes, Mission is Accepted,
With gardens filled with Senses,
I will pass sentence on thee Haiku.
B) Yogi
shinzuiski
11-06-2003, 03:05 PM
do they have to be 3 lines only? ? or can i tbe more ?
sorry to post this and spoil the flow.
j4y3m
11-06-2003, 03:09 PM
Originally posted by shinzuiski@6 November 2003 - 15:05
do they have to be 3 lines only? ? or can i tbe more ?
sorry to post this and spoil the flow.
it has to be 3 lines of 5,7,5
Riddler
11-06-2003, 03:13 PM
Originally posted by SensualGardening@6 November 2003 - 08:00
Oh, Yes, Mission is Accepted,
With gardens filled with Senses,
I will pass sentence on thee Haiku.
B) Yogi
:D
Excellent my friend
Your garden blooms with treasures
Sensually grown
:lol:
@ shinzuiski...the closer you can stick to the formula, the better. but, you can always string more than one Haiku together I suppose. ;)
Evil Gemini
11-06-2003, 03:29 PM
This shit doesnt make sense. Does it have to ryme or its just 5 7 5.
If so
I done a big shit
I am feeling very light
time to eat again
Originally posted by neattairoski@6 November 2003 - 17:29
This shit doesnt make sense. Does it have to ryme or its just 5 7 5.
If so
I done a big shit
I am feeling very light
time to eat again
Very Good!!!
1.5
Yogi
Lamsey
11-06-2003, 03:33 PM
to express one's feelings
in seventeen syllables
is very diffic
Riddler
11-06-2003, 03:35 PM
:lol: Yes it is !
1.0 ;)
Evil Gemini
11-06-2003, 03:42 PM
Goodnight everyone
I am goiing to bed now
It is almost 12
Originally posted by neattairoski@6 November 2003 - 17:42
Goodnight everyone
I am goiing to bed now
It is almost 12
Goodnight!!
1
Riddler
11-06-2003, 04:03 PM
I too must slip away
Dreams of honey-soaked toad warts
Await in wet dreams.
:blink:
;)
Would've made a firm 2.5 if you were in competition.........!!
Don't forget yer towel!!
Nighty!!
B) Yogi
Damnatory
11-06-2003, 04:28 PM
Originally posted by Riddler@6 November 2003 - 17:03
I too must slip away
Dreams of honey-soaked toad warts
Await in wet dreams.
An odd one you are
Yet you are witty by far
Wish I were bizzare!
dingoBaby
11-06-2003, 07:39 PM
It tastes good on bread
English muffins, crackers too
Peanutbutter spread
Riddler
11-06-2003, 10:00 PM
@ Damnatory & dingobaby..........excellent form & structure, however, on the Bizarreness :huh: scale........1.0 ;)
More ! More ! :D
Yellowgreen moisture draining through veigns
of lustfull pain and agony in the making
and poing says me zit
:lol: Yogi
Evil Gemini
11-06-2003, 11:31 PM
I am going nuts (is going 1 or 2 ? :unsure:)
I just want to kill people
now where is that gun
(BTW This haiku has nothing to do with my personality.)
Riddler
11-06-2003, 11:59 PM
@ SG.....gotta give ya 2.7 for the bizarre factor. :D The structure needs work though. :P
:lol:
@ neattairoski.........you scare me so you get an automatic 3 ! :lol:
Evil Gemini
11-07-2003, 12:11 AM
TY!!!
I hate guns but thats the only thing i can write about!!
imported_greekboy
11-07-2003, 12:19 AM
i got a 10 out of 10 for this one in school.
Cigarettes
Light it, puff on it.
I love the nicotine rush.
I still know I'll die.
I hope u like. :blink:
sparsely
11-07-2003, 12:45 AM
Dream all things before
they happen, hear all things played
in the future now.
UKMan
11-07-2003, 12:59 AM
Musing over the yellow buttercup
I saw the cow sensibly it thinking
What happen's when tis gone
Peace
UKMan
edit - typo :blink:
Evil Gemini
11-07-2003, 03:12 AM
Everyone must die
It is inevitable
You can not stop it
Damnatory
11-07-2003, 04:59 AM
Care for gopher goo?
I take it mixed in my stew!
Should I lick the bowl? :x
Riddler
11-07-2003, 01:51 PM
@ greekboy..........very good. 1.0
@ Sparsely............flirting with bizarre ! 2.0
@ UKMan...............well done sir. 2.0
@ neattairoski.............STOP THAT ! Three point oh already !! :lol:
@ Damnatory.............you are truly multi-talented. 2.5
UKMan
11-07-2003, 01:54 PM
I'm sattisfied :D
Peace
UKMan
Evil Gemini
11-07-2003, 02:02 PM
:lol:
Riddler
11-08-2003, 03:02 PM
Surely some Haiku
Softly whispers in your dreams
Share your kinky thoughts
:P
the taste of drewl
morningdew produced by cough
mirror, mirror, where am i
:P
Lilmiss
11-08-2003, 06:32 PM
never understood these silly things
words for the non poets dreams
besides, im useless :D
Originally posted by lilmiss@8 November 2003 - 20:32
never understood these silly things
words for the non poets dreams
besides, im useless :D
1 for the effort
3 for introspection!!!
http://www.mcbriens.net/liam/img/smilies/w00tblur.gifYogi
Riddler
11-09-2003, 04:46 AM
Originally posted by SensualGardening@8 November 2003 - 11:23
the taste of drewl
morningdew produced by cough
mirror, mirror, where am i
:P
http://www.emotipad.com/emoticons/Bow.gif That's malto bizarro SG....a 3 if there ever was one. :D
@ lilmiss..........excellent ! :)
titey
11-09-2003, 04:55 AM
Why did I post here
This just ain't my sorta thing
Maybe I should stop
Riddler
11-09-2003, 04:59 AM
Originally posted by titey@8 November 2003 - 21:55
Why did I post here
This just ain't my sorta thing
Maybe I should stop
:lol: I'm impressed tw ! Full marks for structure and validity of message. Now just reach in that twisted mind of yours for some weirdness and you'll have this thread owned ! :D
titey
11-09-2003, 05:05 AM
Originally posted by Riddler@8 November 2003 - 23:59
Now just reach in that twisted mind of yours for some weirdness
I have no idea
What you mean by that Sir Ridds
There ain't no donkey
Riddler
11-09-2003, 05:06 AM
:lol: :lol:
A solid 2.0 !
sparsely
11-09-2003, 06:41 AM
road construction lights
the way to musical plays
about childrens arms
Riddler
11-09-2003, 08:36 AM
Originally posted by Sparsely@8 November 2003 - 23:41
road construction lights
the way to musical plays
about childrens arms
And the Bizarre Haiku award for November 9, 2003 goes to Sparsely ! :D
http://www.emotipad.com/emoticons/Mexican%20Wave.gif
titey
11-09-2003, 08:59 AM
:huh: Oh.... it's like that huh?
OK then....
If armadillos
are so damned crunchy then how
can Jonno eat them:D
Riddler
11-09-2003, 09:04 AM
:lol: :lol:
OMFG...We have a tie !!!http://www.emotipad.com/emoticons/Excited.gif
That's what we're looking for peeps !! :lol:
OmniZero123
11-10-2003, 10:11 AM
1.as time ticks ever on
life begets a hard struggle
claiming the weakest
2.digging any deeper
searching for lost dreams forever
coming across the truth
3.the utter silence
comes creeping into your house
and screaming wont help
4.opening the large door
reveals how tiny you are now
to the entire world
5.in the gloom of night
the bright eyes creep ever onward
advancing on YOU
6.the true believer
knows no set boundries in life
pushing to the limit
7.flame wars have egnited
brains clashing dis's egnited
legends in their minds
hmm so how ya think i did i could go on forever 7 is enough tho
Riddler
11-10-2003, 10:34 AM
Is Adaptation the word you searched for ?
Well, it must be....you're here ! CONGRATULATIONS !!!
http://www.piczonline.com/client/riddler/prize.jpg
Evil Gemini
11-10-2003, 10:41 AM
In the end we die
We will all be forgotten
Now aint that a bitch
Riddler
11-10-2003, 10:59 AM
http://www.piczonline.com/client/riddler/three.gif
NOW PUT DOWN THAT GUN !!!!!
:lol:
she whispered slowly
now take that carbage outside
i love you too dear
Give myself a 1 here, but it's just so much fun to make 'm!!
:P Yogi
Evil Gemini
11-10-2003, 11:33 AM
Did you like my other one ??
Sorry they all seem to be about death or something :unsure:
Riddler
11-10-2003, 11:35 AM
Originally posted by neattairoski@10 November 2003 - 04:33
Did you like my other one ??
Sorry they all seem to be about death or something :unsure:
See the big red 3 ? ;)
Evil Gemini
11-10-2003, 11:50 AM
Oh cool TY!
I thought it was for someone else :lol:
Lilmiss
11-10-2003, 05:26 PM
Monday fever in my cranium
anticipation in unworked fingers
can someone roll me a fattie? :blink:
titey
11-10-2003, 05:29 PM
:lol: Hee hee hee.... I don't think it follows form sweetness.... but I like it!
Lilmiss
11-10-2003, 05:33 PM
do i look like a conformist? :ph34r: :D
(hey you. ;) )
UKMan
11-10-2003, 05:34 PM
I'm not doing this right
what the hell can there be left
my brain is off center
titey
11-10-2003, 05:35 PM
Originally posted by lilmiss@10 November 2003 - 12:33
(hey you. ;) )
Hey y'self! http://www.piczonline.com/client/titey/sweet.gif
Spatula Geek Girl
11-10-2003, 09:58 PM
1.When is it to explode?
For my milk is green and spotty.
I don't like bangs and stuff.
2.Tis what the flea once said.
"If I had a home, I’d eat it."
But flea is gone now.
3.When shinny fish are near.
A mirror it can be.
See your shinny face, haha.
4.Fuzzy red socks.
Ahhh, they're coming for me.
Tiger shall be fed.
5.I had short hair.
i have long hair.
...it grew.
6.I wrote a haiku.
It wasn't very good.
Not enough syllables, then too many.
7.Deep Thought said "42"
And they didn't like it much.
Looks like I’m out of time.
8.The number eight
is superior indeed.
To seven: it's little sister.
9.And why, number nine,
tis superior most definitely,
to eight: a bad haiku.
10.And ten, not so superior.
I haven't figured why.
This stuff is hard!
:huh: errrrrr...
PIES!!!!
Evil Gemini
11-10-2003, 11:02 PM
My PC is gay
my cd rom doesnt work
might have to format :(
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