What Is Wrong With This Paragraph?

[Keikan]

HI my name is Sara. I have 1 little brother named Joey he is really anoying! and I am not a model but I am to my daddy I am not asian I am fully canadian and I have blackish brown hair. I have brown eyes. My msn is not working right now so please don't ask for it yet I will tell you when its up.

What is wrong with this paragraph?

[MicroScreen2]

HI my name is Sara. I have one little brother named Joey, he is really annoying&#33; <s>and</s> I am not a model but I am to my daddy. I am not asian, I am fully canadian and I have blackish brown hair. I have brown eyes. My msn is not working right now so please don&#39;t ask for it yet, I will tell you when its up.

i know i&#39;ve missed something :huh:

[Mr. Mulder]

not enough pictures? :01:

[internet.news]

I m very drunk but can see gratuitous "&#33;" usage and less capitals than required

[Keikan]

Nothing to do with grammer, read more carefully.

[internet.news]

Originally posted by Keikan@7 July 2004 - 11:06
Nothing to do with grammer, read more carefully.
no :angry:

[MicroScreen2]

she sent you the message on msn?

[Keikan]

I don&#39;t know this person, no

[sArA]

I dont have a brother called Joey and I am not Canadian&#33;&#33; :lol:

[Keikan]

Nope

[MicroScreen2]

theres nothing wrong is there :lol:

[pusher]

Originally posted by Keikan@7 July 2004 - 00:57

I am not a model but I am to my daddy.

What is wrong with this paragraph?
There&#39;s something morally wrong with this statement.

[MicroScreen2]

Originally posted by pusher+7 July 2004 - 12:16--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (pusher @ 7 July 2004 - 12:16)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin-Keikan@7 July 2004 - 00:57

I am not a model but I am to my daddy.

What is wrong with this paragraph?
There&#39;s something morally wrong with this statement. [/b][/quote]
meh&#33; that doesn&#39;t mean her dads a peadophile, just that she&#39;s his little angel. you know, she&#39;s a spoilt brat

[MagicNakor]

A better question would be to ask what is right with that wordbrick.

:ninja:

[pusher]

Originally posted by MicroScreen2@7 July 2004 - 02:19
meh&#33; that doesn&#39;t mean her dads a peadophile, just that she&#39;s his little angel. you know, she&#39;s a spoilt brat
Well, you say potato. :)

[MicroScreen2]

Originally posted by pusher+7 July 2004 - 12:22--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (pusher @ 7 July 2004 - 12:22)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin-MicroScreen2@7 July 2004 - 02:19
meh&#33; that doesn&#39;t mean her dads a peadophile, just that she&#39;s his little angel. you know, she&#39;s a spoilt brat
Well, you say potato. :) [/b][/quote]
i say &#39;tater :blink:

[pusher]

Originally posted by MicroScreen2@7 July 2004 - 02:25
i say &#39;tater :blink:
Hmm... now I want some french fries.

[MicroScreen2]

Originally posted by pusher+7 July 2004 - 12:26--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (pusher @ 7 July 2004 - 12:26)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin-MicroScreen2@7 July 2004 - 02:25
i say &#39;tater :blink:
Hmm... now I want some french fries. [/b][/quote]
you can have half a chip butty if you want. only 50p :D

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[hobbes]

Originally posted by MagicNakor@7 July 2004 - 10:20
A better question would be to ask what is right with that wordbrick.

:ninja:
"Wordbrick" is a copyrighted neologism belonging to me.

My attorney&#39;s are considering legal action and they will definitely :ninja: your ass.


BTW Keikan, it is "grammar".

[Biggles]

Originally posted by MicroScreen2@7 July 2004 - 11:02

HI my name is Sara. I have one little brother named Joey, he is really annoying&#33; <s>and</s> I am not a model but I am to my daddy. I am not asian, I am fully canadian and I have blackish brown hair. I have brown eyes. My msn is not working right now so please don&#39;t ask for it yet, I will tell you when its up.

i know i&#39;ve missed something :huh:
:) The final sentence - it should say "when it&#39;s up".

The grammar and punctuation are awful - so nothing unusual there.

Is it the assertion that one cannot be Asian and fully Canadian?

[J'Pol]

Originally posted by Biggles+7 July 2004 - 23:58--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Biggles @ 7 July 2004 - 23:58)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin-MicroScreen2@7 July 2004 - 11:02

HI my name is Sara. I have one little brother named Joey, he is really annoying&#33; <s>and</s> I am not a model but I am to my daddy. I am not asian, I am fully canadian and I have blackish brown hair. I have brown eyes. My msn is not working right now so please don&#39;t ask for it yet, I will tell you when its up.

i know i&#39;ve missed something :huh:
:) The final sentence - it should say "when it&#39;s up".

The grammar and punctuation are awful - so nothing unusual there.

Is it the assertion that one cannot be Asian and fully Canadian? [/b][/quote]
Surely to be Asian one would have to be born in Asia.

I am European, because I was born in Europe.

Someone born in Canadia would not be Asian. I am not terribly good on the geography thing, but I am fairly clear on that.

[Keikan]

Well you guys figured it out.

1. " I am not a model but I am to my daddy."
Some incest action going on here?

2. "I am not asian, I am fully canadian and I have blackish brown hair. I have brown eyes."

a. she looks like she is fully asian
b. description says she is asian
c. even if you were born in canada you still be asian because your parents are, you just called a canadian born asian.
d. if your talking about how your not asian, then you are asian, if you weren&#39;t asian you wouldn&#39;t be talking about it in the first place

Here is the pic of this girl (http://www.nexopia.com/profile.php?uid=223211)
The picture looks like a 25 year old women though

You might be thinking, what is this site? This is a site where teenage girls can post profiles of themselves promoting their sluttiness.

[sampson]

Hi my name is Sara. I have one little brother named Joey he is really annoying&#33; and (take &#39;and&#39; out)I am not a model but I am to my daddy. I am not asian, I am fully Canadian and I have blackish brown hair and I have brown eyes. My msn is not working right now so please don&#39;t ask for it yet. I will tell you when its up.

I think that&#39;s correct :unsure:

It sounds like she&#39;s just uneducated. She states that she&#39;s from Canada though, maybe English is a second language.

[J'Pol]

Originally posted by Keikan@8 July 2004 - 00:38
a. she looks like she is fully asian
b. description says she is asian
c. even if you were born in canada you still be asian because your parents are, you just called a canadian born asian.
d. if your talking about how your not asian, then you are asian, if you weren&#39;t asian you wouldn&#39;t be talking about it in the first place

Are you aware that you are a racist piece of shit ?

I just thought I should ask, because there is a slight possibility that you were not aware.

Trust me, you are.

[Keikan]

hey i&#39;m exactly like that girl born in canada, and asian parents only i think i&#39;m still asian

[internet.news]

Originally posted by Keikan@7 July 2004 - 23:54
hey i&#39;m exactly like that girl
You wish (http://www.asiafinest.com/forum/index.php?showtopic=3001&st=6)

[Keikan]

what does that have to do with anything?

[J'Pol]

Originally posted by Keikan@8 July 2004 - 00:54
hey i&#39;m exactly like that girl born in canada, and asian parents only i think i&#39;m still asian
She is Canadian and considers herself Canadian because she was born in Canadia.

What makes you think that your parent being Asian makes you Asian, or precludes you from being a racist piece of shit.

Can I make this any clearer, your post clearly indicated that you were a racist, whatever your own background. You are scum and I have no time for you.

[Biggles]

J&#39;Pol

I think nationality and racial identity are separate issues.

I think you are right in that there is a racist undertone in the piece - but it is not Keikan that is the source. The girl in question appears to be pandering to some sort of expected stereotype. I haven&#39;t bothered checking the link but it sounds awful.

[J'Pol]

Originally posted by Biggles@8 July 2004 - 01:02
J&#39;Pol

I think nationality and racial identity are separate issues.

I think you are right in that there is a racist undertone in the piece - but it is not Keikan that is the source. The girl in question appears to be pandering to some sort of expected stereotype. I haven&#39;t bothered checking the link but it sounds awful.
I care not one jot.

His explanation of how the paragraph was wrong is intrinsically racist. No matter his own background.

I find it intolerable and will say so.

[internet.news]

Originally posted by Keikan@7 July 2004 - 23:59
what does that have to do with anything?
Ok - edited out half of what I quoted to you to make the joke clearer. But as they say "If you have to explain it.....


:unsure:

[hobbes]

Jpol was being a bit harsh.

In her mind, based on where and how she was raised, she considers her mindset to be more inline with someone who is Canadian, rather than someone raised in the Orient.

Her citizenship and mind are Canadian, her phenotype(physical appearance) is Asian.

Which is more important?

I think her desire to separate herself from "Asians" is an attempt to illustrate that she is more interested in people and not ethinic origin. She mentions it because she has been racially stereotyped and does not like that.

Anti-spam sucks again


The "racial" issue IS with Keikan, but I think he wants her to acknowlegde her racial origin and not distance herself from it.

I don&#39;t think he is being malicious at all, I think his point is that, "Hey why distance yourself from your heritage. You can be a proud Canadian, without try to disrespect your heritage".

Overall, I think nobody has done anything wrong.

[internet.news]

Originally posted by hobbes@8 July 2004 - 00:08
Jpol was being a bit harsh.

In her mind, based on where and how she was raised, she considers her mindset to be more inline with someone who is Canadian, rather than someone raised in the Orient.

Her citizenship and mind are Canadian, her phenotype(physical appearance) is Asian.

Which is more important?

I think her desire to separate herself from "Asians" is an attempt to illustrate that she is more interested in people and not ethinic origin. She mentions it because she has been racially stereotyped and does not like that.

Anti-spam sucks again
That&#39;s how I read it... and I guess Keikan did too but maybe we missed something?

[121]

Is she an asian in denial?

EDIT: You guys post fast&#33;

[J'Pol]

Originally posted by 121@8 July 2004 - 01:10
Is she an asian in denial?

EDIT: You guys post fast&#33;
No, you are a prick trolling.

[J'Pol]

Originally posted by hobbes@8 July 2004 - 01:08
Jpol was being a bit harsh.

In her mind, based on where and how she was raised, she considers her mindset to be more inline with someone who is Canadian, rather than someone raised in the Orient.

Her citizenship and mind are Canadian, her phenotype(physical appearance) is Asian.

Which is more important?

I think her desire to separate herself from "Asians" is an attempt to illustrate that she is more interested in people and not ethinic origin. She mentions it because she has been racially stereotyped and does not like that.

Anti-spam sucks again


The "racial" issue IS with Keikan, but I think he wants her to acknowlegde her racial origin and not distance herself from it.

I don&#39;t think he is being malicious at all, I think his point is that, "Hey why distance yourself from your heritage. You can be a proud Canadian, without try to disrespect your heritage".

Overall, I think nobody has done anything wrong.
If you think I was being harsh that is up to you.

However I do not believe that racist posting is acceptable and as such I comment on it.

[hobbes]

ok

[121]

Originally posted by J&#39;Pol+8 July 2004 - 00:12--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (J&#39;Pol @ 8 July 2004 - 00:12)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin-121@8 July 2004 - 01:10
Is she an asian in denial?

EDIT: You guys post fast&#33;
No, you are a prick trolling. [/b][/quote]
J&#39;Pol,

You&#39;ve lost me again man :ph34r: Whenever I post you give a negative response&#33;

[internet.news]

Originally posted by J&#39;Pol@8 July 2004 - 00:14
However I do not believe that racist posting is acceptable and as such I comment on it.
I agree - completely unacceptable but I think I missed something in the paragraph to mke it such. Saying that I am not fully awake atm.

But Hobbes is always right


....but so is JP so :unsure:

[Biggles]

Originally posted by J&#39;Pol+8 July 2004 - 00:06--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (J&#39;Pol @ 8 July 2004 - 00:06)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin-Biggles@8 July 2004 - 01:02
J&#39;Pol

I think nationality and racial identity are separate issues.

I think you are right in that there is a racist undertone in the piece - but it is not Keikan that is the source. The girl in question appears to be pandering to some sort of expected stereotype. I haven&#39;t bothered checking the link but it sounds awful.
I care not one jot.

His explanation of how the paragraph was wrong is intrinsically racist. No matter his own background.

I find it intolerable and will say so. [/b][/quote]
I understand what you are saying, although I think you are being a tad harsh on Keikan.

I followed the link. I am not sure what it is about but she would appear to be a rather pretty 14 year old Canadian of Japanese parentage. I am not entirely sure the parents would be comfortable with what she has done.

It might be fair to say that the only true Canadians are Native Americans. The rest are all a mixture of their source races. However, who am I to question the melting pot. If as Hobbes suggests she is trying to get away from stereotypes then this is good. I must say though, I read the piece as though it was written negatively about her own racial background, but I am content I may be wrong about this. I don&#39;t know enough about the dynamics of Canadian society to assess what is really going on - other than she appears to be trying to misbehave.

[J'Pol]

Originally posted by Biggles+8 July 2004 - 01:22--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Biggles @ 8 July 2004 - 01:22)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'>
Originally posted by J&#39;Pol@8 July 2004 - 00:06
<!--QuoteBegin-Biggles@8 July 2004 - 01:02
J&#39;Pol

I think nationality and racial identity are separate issues.

I think you are right in that there is a racist undertone in the piece - but it is not Keikan that is the source. The girl in question appears to be pandering to some sort of expected stereotype. I haven&#39;t bothered checking the link but it sounds awful.
I care not one jot.

His explanation of how the paragraph was wrong is intrinsically racist. No matter his own background.

I find it intolerable and will say so.
I understand what you are saying, although I think you are being a tad harsh on Keikan.

I followed the link. I am not sure what it is about but she would appear to be a rather pretty 14 year old Canadian of Japanese parentage. I am not entirely sure the parents would be comfortable with what she has done.

It might be fair to say that the only true Canadians are Native Americans. The rest are all a mixture of their source races. However, who am I to question the melting pot. If as Hobbes suggests she is trying to get away from stereotypes then this is good. I must say though, I read the piece as though it was written negatively about her own racial background, but I am content I may be wrong about this. I don&#39;t know enough about the dynamics of Canadian society to assess what is really going on - other than she appears to be trying to misbehave. [/b][/quote]
What has the link to do with anything.

It is his explanation of the paragraph which is important, not the justification.

[hobbes]

Originally posted by Biggles@7 July 2004 - 22:22
I don&#39;t know enough about the dynamics of Canadian society to assess what is really going on - other than she appears to be trying to misbehave.
Asian Canadian Highschool Girls in Trouble.

I love it&#33; I mean, we all love Chinese food, why not their women as well. I know I do, big time.

[Biggles]

J&#39;Pol

If Keikan were not the same race as the girl and was using the information to slight then I would agree. I read his piece (Keikan is a he ?) as indignation that the girl was denying what he is clearly proud of. Perhaps inverted racism would be a more appropriate charge.

However, it is late and my brain hurts.

[Cheese]

1. " I am not a model but I am to my daddy."
Some incest action going on here?

You are an idiot. What daddy doesn&#39;t tell his daughter she is the most beautiful girl in the world...you have a dirty mind.

[Keikan]

ok thats fair

[Biggles]

Originally posted by Withcheese@8 July 2004 - 00:34

1. " I am not a model but I am to my daddy."
Some incest action going on here?

You are an idiot. What daddy doesn&#39;t tell his daughter she is the most beautiful girl in the world...you have a dirty mind.
:lol:

Now this is a totally separate issue and an area on much firmer footing.

[J'Pol]

Originally posted by Biggles@8 July 2004 - 01:31
If Keikan were not the same race as the girl
What does his race matter.

He is Canadian and so is she, if we are to believe what we are told.

That makes no difference and does not change the fact that his explanation of how the paragraph was wrong was indicative of racism.

Unless you accept that people of the same race cannot be racist towards one and other. Which I consider to be wrong.

[manker]

Originally posted by J&#39;Pol@8 July 2004 - 00:44
Unless you accept that people of the same race cannot be racist towards one and other. Which I consider to be wrong.
thats fine because it&#39;s your opinion. one I do not share but I don&#39;t doubt your right to express it. I did, however, think it rather harsh that you labelled keikan a &#39;racist piece of shit&#39; because of this.

It seemed to me that he is just of the opinion that she should be proud of her heritage, as he is.

[Biggles]

Originally posted by J&#39;Pol+8 July 2004 - 00:44--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (J&#39;Pol @ 8 July 2004 - 00:44)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin-Biggles@8 July 2004 - 01:31
If Keikan were not the same race as the girl
What does his race matter.

He is Canadian and so is she, if we are to believe what we are told.

That makes no difference and does not change the fact that his explanation of how the paragraph was wrong was indicative of racism.

Unless you accept that people of the same race cannot be racist towards one and other. Which I consider to be wrong. [/b][/quote]
It is possible - one does not have to look far afield to see it, albeit couched in religious sectarian garb.

My hesitation is not in the possibility but rather than the intent of what Keikan said. However, it is simply my reading of what was said - your interpretation could be equally correct.

Perhaps Keikan should expand on his meaning. Then whether it was racism or inverted racism might be more apparent. However, I am off to bed.

[hobbes]

Originally posted by Biggles@7 July 2004 - 23:08


However, I am off to bed.
Yeah, porn star Biggles.

All he wants is to do get his poppa swerve on.

[Biggles]

Originally posted by hobbes+8 July 2004 - 01:10--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (hobbes @ 8 July 2004 - 01:10)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin-Biggles@7 July 2004 - 23:08


However, I am off to bed.
Yeah, porn star Biggles.

All he wants is to do get his poppa swerve on. [/b][/quote]
Perchance to sleep


with no rub at all :(

[J'Pol]

Originally posted by Biggles+8 July 2004 - 02:15--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Biggles @ 8 July 2004 - 02:15)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'>
Originally posted by hobbes@8 July 2004 - 01:10
<!--QuoteBegin-Biggles@7 July 2004 - 23:08


However, I am off to bed.
Yeah, porn star Biggles.

All he wants is to do get his poppa swerve on.
Perchance to sleep


with no rub at all :( [/b][/quote]
What dreams may come ??

[thewizeard]

Originally posted by Keikan@7 July 2004 - 10:57

HI my name is Sara. I have 1 little brother named Joey he is really anoying&#33; and I am not a model but I am to my daddy I am not asian I am fully canadian and I have blackish brown hair. I have brown eyes. My msn is not working right now so please don&#39;t ask for it yet I will tell you when its up.

What is wrong with this paragraph?

It is not a paragraph...it is a sentence&#33;

:lol: