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lightshow
08-10-2004, 05:47 AM
I wrote ALL this, stapled and sewed an envelope together, drew pictures, and added a red rose. and put it on this girls car (the one on the right) around 4 in the morning.

i fell in love with her..

the first time i saw you
you were standing on the edge
a scandelous sillhiotte against the cresent moon
you just stood there
your eyes fixed upon the skies
staring straight into the heavens
then you turned around
and for a brief moument we were face to face
i stood staring into your eyes
you turned away
walked out the door and you were gone
smoke left in your haste

at that point i knew there was something about you
something that i thought i already knew
it was deep inside
but nothing you would ever hide...

A year has past
i see you again
i don't even know where to begin
you always seem to make my breath spin
so there we were united once again
bouncing up and down
while running round and round
every second stretched the hour
while every moument was anything but sour
we sang and danced and everything but romanced
it seemed the day would never end
then i saw you again
this time the sky was black
and i suffered my first attack
with a swollen fist
well you get the jist
for the days to come
i thought you and i were done
as hard as i tried, i couldn't let you go
you seemed to di out your very own space in my soul
a place where you shall stay forever

we lost contact later
but as always i saw you again
you'd think two weeks'd be a sin
i thought i knew everything about you
your smile, your toch, all but your soft kiss
but everyday brought something brand new
something to look foward to
so that's what i'd do
i'd tack all my time together and spend it with you

as i did, time seemed to stand still
like a broken hour glass
sand flowing out of the edges
too full and rich to contain
that's where we were
brusting with passion
flowing with love and energy
noglass to confy our two beings
no shards to cut us apart
together and unseperable
i wouldn't have gave it up for the world

through and through i sit daydreaming
watching the clouds as they pass by
the sands of time moving again
the glass restored
and the barrier resurrected
I could say i'm sorry for what i did
but the truth is, although it paihns me
is that if ic ould turn back time
i wouldn't touch a thing
as we begin to break contact more and more
as the walls begin to rise higher and higher
as i replay it over and over in my head
i just want to get the chance to lose you again...
even if it was so i could say goodbye

but if we could start again
i know how i'd begin
i remeber you saying
i'd be good at dating
that's the only thing i'll ever regret
i never got a chance
witha stupid tie on
a small smirk on my face
a few hits of cologne
and those few fearful seconds before i hit the bell
only to watch you walkdown the stairs
i'd take you out
rose in hand
our toes curled up the sand
watching the stars creep overhead
the fire turning a yellowish-red
with candles slowly flickering the night away
just bright enough to make you wish to stay
forever

what do you think?

VaVaVoom
08-10-2004, 06:54 AM
I think you need to learn the difference between poetry and prose.

DarthInsinuate
08-10-2004, 11:32 AM
Originally posted by lightshow@10 August 2004 - 06:48
I wrote ALL this, stapled and sewed an envelope together, drew pictures, and added a red rose. and put it on this girls car (the one on the right) around 4 in the morning.

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what do you think?
seems like a lot of effort to ask a girl to review your prosem