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Originally posted by Wednesday@29 November 2003 - 21:48
It's very difficult to constructively critcise 1 page of prose. :)
You should finish your novel and submit it to a teacher or publishing house for criticism.
On saying that, the imagery and metaphors are quite good, but, perhaps a little overdone.
Overdone? Well it beats underdone. It caught my attention, which is saying somethig for a first page. It is hard in one sense to judge writing and content by only one page, but as an introduction, I can many times tell by the first couple chapters, if not the first few pages, if a novel (or short story) is going to be something enjoyable to follow. I've read many good short stories that have'nt been but a few pages. In my opinion, for what its worth, you have a good start. I suggest you not get too wrapped up in the first page, but have a destination and clear cut path on how to get there. You draft and redraft until you get it like you want it. Its way too early to get other peoples opinion because people many times, with good intensions in mind, influence or suggest changes that are not for the better. For myself, if on a project, think it would be better to not show but the finished product. Then... an editor could tear it to shreds. :D