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[Keikan]

HI my name is Sara. I have 1 little brother named Joey he is really anoying! and I am not a model but I am to my daddy I am not asian I am fully canadian and I have blackish brown hair. I have brown eyes. My msn is not working right now so please don't ask for it yet I will tell you when its up.

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[MicroScreen2]

HI my name is Sara. I have one little brother named Joey, he is really annoying&#33; <s>and</s> I am not a model but I am to my daddy. I am not asian, I am fully canadian and I have blackish brown hair. I have brown eyes. My msn is not working right now so please don&#39;t ask for it yet, I will tell you when its up.

i know i&#39;ve missed something

[Mr. Mulder]

not enough pictures?

[internet.news]

I m very drunk but can see gratuitous "&#33;" usage and less capitals than required

[Keikan]

Nothing to do with grammer, read more carefully.

[internet.news]

Originally posted by Keikan@7 July 2004 - 11:06
Nothing to do with grammer, read more carefully.

no

[MicroScreen2]

she sent you the message on msn?

[Keikan]

I don&#39;t know this person, no

[sArA]

I dont have a brother called Joey and I am not Canadian&#33;&#33;

[Keikan]

Nope